I Do….Rewrite and new first chapter

Hi guys. I am still working on the re-write of I Do, and so far it is going great. I am changing a lot of the things that happened, adding new stuff and generally creating a more spooky atmosphere to the story as it had been rushed before. As a treat I will post the new first chapter of the story.

February 14th, 1963

Carolina Haines felt like she’d waited years for this day to arrive; though in reality it had only a few months. She couldn’t believe the day had finally arrived. It was her wedding day and she ensured everything was perfect before she took those steps down the aisle. It was her wedding day and she had ensured everything was perfect before she took those steps down the aisle. She was nearly forty and was finally ready to settle down and start a family, something she had wanted for many years but never had the chance to. Now the day was finally here, after months of preparation she was going to be marrying the guy she loved.

Carolina’s best friend. Shauna, entered the room and asked if she was ready to get married, to become Mrs Ronald Haroldson. Carolina assured she was and took a deep breath, trying to shake the nerves away. She knew some people didn’t agree with the marriage, although she was unsure why. But she and Ronald loved each other and that was all that mattered to her, that she would be spending her life with someone whom she loved and loved her back.

Carolina wished her father could see her but he had passed away when she had been very young – she could scarcely remember him, although she held a picture of them together in her wallet from her fifth birthday. Although her mother was alive she was unwell and was unable to attend the wedding. Carolina had them both in her heart that day, and knew her father would be with her as she took this moment in her life.

She took one final look in the mirror and smoothed down her dress. This would be the last time she would see herself as a single woman, after this she would be one half of a whole, a part of puzzle. She would no longer be alone. She smiled and looked over at her best friend. “Let’s do this.” Shauna followed behind Carolina and closed the door behind them.

As Carolina walked slowly down the aisle her heart began to beat a little faster and she could feel herself beginning to sweat through the dress. She tried to take her mind off it, she wasn’t going to allow her nerves to get the better of her. This was the day she had waited for since she was a child, the day she had been planned for as long as she could remember. This was the day in which she was the centre of attention, hearing the gasps and whispers from her friends and family as they looked at her walking down the aisle towards Ronald Haroldson, her true love.

Ronald and Carolina had met three years previously and there was an instant connection between them. It hadn’t taken them long to fall in love and move in together and just after their third anniversary and she hadn’t hesitated in saying yes. She had spent months preparing for the day, ensuring the venue was correct and that flowers and the cake had been ordered. The dress had taken her a while to find but once she had it, she knew it was the dress for her. After a few alterations she was wearing the dress of her dreams and was about to bond herself with the man of her dreams.

Her eyes glanced around the room slowly as she made her way to the front and she noticed how beautiful it had been more. It was more than she imagined, more than she expected. There was a large canopy which was the main attraction which was covered in white and peach roses. White material draped around the room and white and peach covers adorned the chairs. A red runner ran from the door to the altar and was dressed with rose petals. She was approaching the altar when she felt herself becoming weaker and light headed.

Her body started shivering and she had chills but she was still sweating. Her stomach knotted and she struggled to keep herself from being sick, she had only eaten a salad a few hours before the wedding. The lights started to become bright and she could feel herself getting dizzy. She tried to shake the feeling off, putting it down to nerves. She suddenly became weak and had to hold onto a chair for support.

“Baby, are you alright?” She heard the panic in her fiancées voice as rushed to her side and pulled her close to him, holding her as her body shook. In the background the guests panicked and tried to find a telephone to call an ambulance. Her body started to convulse violently and she started to foam at the mouth. She tried to speak but she couldn’t get any words out. Her stomach became tighter and she felt a shooting pain throughout. She was slipping away from the world; she could feel the darkness consuming her. The voices around her became quieter and the images became blurred as she was pulled away from the living.

She didn’t know what was happening to her, didn’t know why this had happened. She had been so careful to not eat anything, to not touch or drink anything that she didn’t know. Her thoughts were jumbled and all she could think was she wouldn’t be able to get married and she would be leaving Ronald on his own. She wished she was able to tell him she was sorry; sorry she would not be becoming his wife. She looked over at him but he was just an outline, a blur.. As her body began to fail her, she heard a silent whisper in her ear as she felt arms wrapped around her tightly.

“I knew I’d get you.” The voice was familiar but cruel. A tone of voice she hadn’t hear before. She could vaguely make out Ronald’s shape if she squinted.

“That money is mine”. Ronald had done this to her, he had taken her life…so he could get the money from her life insurance. The last thing she saw before she slipped away was his grinning face.

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